Yes. I would change the sentence to read
Posted By: alphabet soup on 2007-07-06
In Reply to: Would you change this sentence? - grammar, grammar, grammar
Subject: Yes. I would change the sentence to read
You Wrote: "His eye contact was intermittent; most of the time his gaze was fixed on whatever toy he was playing with. "...most of the time his gaze was fixed on whatever toy with which he was playing? Not a verbatim account.
I would change it to read: "His eye contact was intermittent. Most of the time, his gaze was fixed on whatever toy he was playing with."
Rule of thumb: semicolon: punctuation mark that is used in formal writing between two parts of a sentence, usually when each of the two parts could form grammatical sentences on their own. Also, to be grammatically correct, never end a sentence with a preposition.
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Would you change this sentence?
Subject: Would you change this sentence?
His eye contact was intermittent; most of the time his gaze was fixed on whatever toy he was playing with.
...most of the time his gaze was fixed on whatever toy with which he was playing?
Not a verbatim account.
TIA
unless you change sentence
Subject: unless you change sentence
I'd leave it because he obviously means that patient had no precipitating symptoms of the chest pain, etc.
well, if not verbatim change order of sentence...
Subject: well, if not verbatim change order of sentence...
i just think saying when he *valsalvas* is wrong...
named after:
Antonio Maria Valsalva
Italian anatomist, born June 17, 1666, Imola, in Romagna; died February 2, 1723. Bologna
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so I think the order/structure of the sentence would need to be changed IF NOT VERBATIM....
JMO.... |
Wonder if the sentence should read as follows..... sm
Subject: Wonder if the sentence should read as follows..... sm
As there is more than one type of statin drug.
This patient will possibly require the addition of a statin due to poor response to the "TriCor" and niacin treatment.......
Can you change sentence structure to maybe repeat CT scan?
Subject: Can you change sentence structure to maybe repeat CT scan?
sounds like the sentence should read
Subject: sounds like the sentence should read
"upper extremity,right HAND rigidity with bright red ____ but I don't know what that word is you're questioning.
okay...read the sentence again with impeding--sm
Subject: okay...read the sentence again with impeding--sm
in it and that does not make any sense either. actually none of the suggestions do. JMO
If you read the sentence you should be able to figure that one out, not hard. nm
Subject: If you read the sentence you should be able to figure that one out, not hard. nm
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that should read "whole sentence" not sure what happened !
Subject: that should read "whole sentence" not sure what happened !
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? referring to Schatzki "ring." ? should the sentence read s/m)
Subject: ? referring to Schatzki "ring." ? should the sentence read s/m)
...a flex sig in 1999 "and" multiple esophageal dilations for rings.
I am assuming that the sentence should read his baseline creatinine clearance is 74.
Subject: I am assuming that the sentence should read his baseline creatinine clearance is 74.
overread vs over-read vs over read
Subject: overread vs over-read vs over read
OneLook has a disclaimer for the definition of the word overread that says: This definition is from the 1913 Webster's Dictionary and may be outdated. Some of the links listed on OneLook give the definition, some say the word does not exist, another gives the definition and then says (not used). There are references online for over-read, overread, and over read. I think over-read with a hyphen is a nice compromise. It's situations like this that make me dazed and confused!
s/l Bez or all in change
Subject: s/l Bez or all in change
shows the patient in sinus mechanism 66 beats per minute, normal intervals, normal axis. Voltage criteria for LVH and s/l Bezoiorall is change in comparison to prior EKG dated
Thanks so much to both of you. I will change to 6, 90, and -1. nm
Subject: Thanks so much to both of you. I will change to 6, 90, and -1. nm
I change that to:
Subject: I change that to:
I change elicitable (which to my knowledge has never been a "real word" to "able to be elicited." My doctor dictator thanked me for this once (I was suprised that he noticed). I checked this out with several transcripitionists that I have worked with who have lots of experience and are CMTs and they also edit this word to "able to be elicited."
I'm not CMT and I change that the same way...nm
Subject: I'm not CMT and I change that the same way...nm
  
cc to mL - do you change cc to mL
Subject: cc to mL - do you change cc to mL
according to AAMT or do you type cc
Thanks
Would you change this...
Would you change CT head to say head CT? The doctor says CT head.
Thanx
VR change
Subject: VR change
He should point it out to his supervisor because it is wrong. I don't care what QA says unless they can show me a resource where they got their information and it checks out. I would also point out to the client this fact. If they don't want to have their transcription correct and concise then I don't want their work. Right is right, wrong is wrong. I am really strong on this especially since the "new AAMT" has made all their "changes" and believe their BOS is the bible. It is not. Many of their "rules" are correct. Many of the are not. Research some of their changes and you will see just how over the top they have gone (it seems to be a control issue and they WILL cram it down your throat). I say that we all research on our own and go to reliable trusted sources that have been proven over time to be correct. The "New AAMT" definitely has not proven itself over time and incidentally they are not there for Americans anymore, they are there for the "overseas community." Humbug on them! Anyone know who could take the place of AAMT for American transcriptionits? After all, we are all Americans here and the language is English.
I would change it to this
Subject: I would change it to this
patients blood pressure readings at home daily have been 90 percent plus. Would leave as is or change........looks wrong.
Patient's daily at home blood pressure readings have been 90%+.
they can change...
Subject: they can change...
depends on what the MD hears on auscultation; that being said, it usually is 3/6, 2-3/6...etc... six is the prime as there are standard 6 heart sounds and the first number being how many of the 6 they hear.
When did p.r.n. change to p.R.n. and why?
Subject: When did p.r.n. change to p.R.n. and why?
nm
I would change it to (sm)
Subject: I would change it to (sm)
CPKs as it appears these labs were done multiple times if they are dictating MBs. I hope I'm making sense.
I'd put, CPKs were high but his MBs were normal.
I would change it to
Subject: I would change it to
Mrs. Smith is a patient on whom I performed rhinoplasty. but that is just me.
Just like you have it, why change anything?
Subject: Just like you have it, why change anything?
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I always change that to *in regard*..sm
Subject: I always change that to *in regard*..sm
as for toward/towards, afterward/afterwards......both are acceptable as you said per the dictionary......so it depends on the MD I'm working for...I have one that is a stickler so I give him afterwards and towards as he says them.
Exactly, that is why I don't understand, QA does the same with H&H, they change it H and H. Nm
Subject: Exactly, that is why I don't understand, QA does the same with H&H, they change it H and H. Nm
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...or 'otherwise no overall change"..??? nm
Subject: ...or 'otherwise no overall change"..??? nm
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I would change it to ൜ mEq K/L" sm
Subject: I would change it to ൜ mEq K/L" sm
The dictator is "slanging" the order. Since what they're ordering is K (potassium) and that is measured in mEq, and since it has a unit of measurement (mEq), then the "/liter" needs to be abbreviated to /L... imho (wouldn't it be nice if they dictated PROPER medication orders?) :)
I'd change to "mg," as well, but (sm)
Subject: I'd change to "mg," as well, but (sm)
the manufacturer's site would seem to indicate it should be hyphenated, as you originally had it.
http://www.jnj.com/index.jsp?content=product/brands/NEUTRA_PHOS.htm
"Prior" change? nm
Subject: "Prior" change? nm
m
yes, but change it to "are"
Subject: yes, but change it to "are"
nm
it looks weird to me too...I always change it to...
Subject: it looks weird to me too...I always change it to...
it's not necessarily correct - but I think about pussy cats and so the *eye is crusty and has pus* is what I'd put. 
No, I wouldn't change it because
Subject: No, I wouldn't change it because
it is a myth that there is a problem with that sentence structure.
Do I change it when he dictates cc? nm
Subject: Do I change it when he dictates cc? nm
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I would change it since account not
Subject: I would change it since account not
verbatim. LOL "hook up with"
Doctors are so funny.
If you are safe to change it, do it.
Subject: If you are safe to change it, do it.
nm
Personally, I'd change it to, I was able to
Subject: Personally, I'd change it to, I was able to
get in touch with the patient's daughter, as I am my own QA. My doc lets me spritz up his letters all the time.
see messge - I would change to
Subject: see messge - I would change to
arthroscopy of lateral retinaculum.
I usually change this to bear weight
Subject: I usually change this to bear weight
I think your safe to change this one. Verbatim SM
Subject: I think your safe to change this one. Verbatim SM
is not always possible, especially with ESLs. Wouldn't think doc would mind if you made it more understandable and it doesn't change the meaning.
...and no overall change...??? Is the 'z' sound very pronounced? nm
Subject: ...and no overall change...??? Is the 'z' sound very pronounced? nm
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AAMT is not to blame here (for a change). sm
Subject: AAMT is not to blame here (for a change). sm
I bought the American Medical Association style guide and it, too, reflects these changes. AAMT BOS is just a trickle down from the AMA, Chicago Manual of Style, and the other many sources of which it is comprised. The changes are industry-wide, not just for us, but our work is what is permanent on the patients' charts so we have to pay particular attention to them.
re-x-ray is correct, but I usually change it to x-ray again. I think it looks and sounds better.
Subject: re-x-ray is correct, but I usually change it to x-ray again. I think it looks and sounds better.
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I would change it to allow. What testament is he dictating from? LOL
Subject: I would change it to allow. What testament is he dictating from? LOL
Fundal height change?
Subject: Fundal height change?
...Can't assume that you should change it if not directed to do so. nm
Subject: ...Can't assume that you should change it if not directed to do so. nm
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that's right catch it, check it, change it
Subject: that's right catch it, check it, change it
nm
I always change to saturating, per my company QA
Subject: I always change to saturating, per my company QA
I change to saturating/saturation, i.e.,
Subject: I change to saturating/saturation, i.e.,
the patient is saturating 99%. Saturation was 99%. Satting is slang for saturating, sat for saturation.
I need to change it to has gotten. mtroadie, you are great!...sm
Subject: I need to change it to has gotten. mtroadie, you are great!...sm
I think this site should have a board where grammar and style questions can be asked. That is where so many mistakes are being made these days. I think it would be very informative.
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